Grammarly AI Tweaks The Story

The main problem with the CHAT-GPT Turbo version is its flowery purple prose, which contains too many adjectives and adverbs. A good human writer would write less with better impact. Grammarly doesn't make substantial changes.

Nestled in the heart of a snowy mountain range lies a small, historic wooden cabin that has withstood the test of time. Here, two women, a mother and daughter, share a serene moment together. The mother, adorned in a warm fur coat and a classic black cowboy hat, carries the wisdom and grace of years spent in these rugged lands. Her daughter, wearing a white lab coat that signifies her nursing profession, exudes a sense of care and dedication as vast as the mountains behind them.

Their story is one of resilience and compassion, a tale that intertwines the ruggedness of the wild with the tenderness of human care. The mother, once a robust figure in the community, now leans on her daughter for physical and emotional support. Inspired by her mother's nurturing spirit, the daughter pursued a career in medicine and has returned to her roots to provide care not only to her aging parent but also to the small community nestled within these mountains. Together, they represent the cycle of life, where once the mother guided the daughter, and now the daughter guided the mother.

As they sit side by side, a small herd of bison ambles by, their thick coats glistening with snowflakes. These majestic creatures, much like the women, are an integral part of the region's identity, symbolizing strength and endurance. The quiet companionship of the mother and daughter, set against the backdrop of the mighty bison and the towering peaks, tells a story of love, resilience, and the unbreakable bonds that hold us together through the seasons of life. This story reminds us that the bonds of family and community, the strength of resilience, and the power of compassion are invaluable in navigating life's challenges.

Asked to take out the purple and make it more impactful and serene, CHAT-GPT provides this:

In a snowy mountain range, a simple wooden cabin stands. Inside, a mother in a fur coat and cowboy hat and her daughter in a nurse's uniform share a quiet moment. Their lives are marked by resilience and care; the mother, once a community pillar, now relies on her daughter, who chose medicine to continue her legacy of nurturing. As they sit together, bison pass by, embodying the region's strength. This scene of mother and daughter, against the backdrop of nature, reflects a deep bond and the enduring value of serenity in facing life's challenges.

Interesting but still weirdly robotic, especially the first sentence. Shorter is better, though; the one-paragraph story doesn't miss much from the (asked-for) three-paragraph version. We are still laden with cliches, but we *did* ask CHAT-GPT to look at the picture and tell a story. Given that the ability to write a single coherent sentence is rare in human adults, we need to give the bow to AI. After all, AI is limited to what humans have written, so it's really a cliche machine.